I’m not saying that this one was prompted by all the warmongering going on in the world because everything around me influences what I write.
As a conversational passage, I think you did pretty well. Decent exposition, the conversation flowed well, with different voices and opinions, and the plot advanced. Nice work. Now, when do we have to move?
As a conversational passage, I think you did pretty well. Decent exposition, the conversation flowed well, with different voices and opinions, and the plot advanced. Nice work. Now, when do we have to move?